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she hides behind her old fashioned glasses
dark rims, broken lenses
it was an accident the first time, he says
but the second time, no defenses

stranger, stranger in my arms
didn’t you promise to do me no harm?
you bruise and burn the skin laid bare
hurting deeper everywhere

what happened to the girl we knew?
dust to ashes and ashes to dust
when the door’s been shut and locked
she only does as she knows she must

black and blue, pick and choose
someone to hurt, i want you
someone to hold, i need you
someone to blame, no one but you

and he’s a little different now
or maybe he’s always been this way
he’s commanding, sharp, harsh with words
something somewhere led him astray

she trembles as he quietly approaches
she cares for him and hides her tears
but covers her heart, for she still fears
she holds his hand like that very first day
though both have changed more than they can say

he carefully kisses her as he coaxes
those withered words from between her lips
those hands caress her yielding hips
she whimpers and he changes right there
hurting her more than she can bear

the contrast is stark
the room is dark
there’s a word for this, but it isn’t love.
Um. Well this is a depressing piece of poetry.

It kind of just... came out. Like most of my poetry does. I wasn't even sure what it was going to be about until I started typing. D:

This is a lot more serious than my normal works, that's for sure. And abuse is a real issue-- physical, emotional, sexual. I hope people take this to heart.

Not much else to say here. I tried to rhyme this time, instead of just sticking words together like I normally do. I have no idea how it turned out though, I'm a terrible judge of my own writing.
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cutiekidd Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2008
The rhyming is fine, dear.

But you're right. :O There is a problem of abuse. And it's rising as well.
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Crazy-Rat Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2007
Wow. That was brilliantly written. You set the mood perfectly It is disturbing what people do to each other.
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mazhi Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2007  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
that was horribly sad!!!! gosh reading poems like this makes me soooo sad!!!! it was an amazing poem!!!! but the subject was so sad!!!! T_T
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Nessio Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2007
Omg, I almost cried .___.'

You're such a great poet your words just reached my heart.

It IS depressing, but it really impressed me <3
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Blu-sanity Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2007
wow.
this is amazing. o_o
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quark-berry Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2007
:0
thank you!!

<333
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zebra-airplane Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2007
omg. i love this.
i honestlly wish i could write like this.
it's so beautiful.
OMG :wow:
just amazing.
i absolutely love the end
"there's a word for this, but it isn't love"
oomg :excited:
i loveeee itt! :clap:
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quark-berry Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2007
augh!
I am
SO
SO
SO
flattered!!
:excited:
thank you soooo much :0
I admire your poetry loads, you have no idea D:

just... THANK YOU!! you've definitely made my day :]]

:hug::glomp::heart::love:
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natespixie Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2007
It's depressing, but beautifully written.
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quark-berry Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2007
Thank you. It's a serious issue, so it was difficult writing it, but I'm glad it turned out well.

Thanks for the fav :]
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